Victoria Barrett, “Not Sold in Stores”

The morning after their first night together, she can foresee the entirety of their two-year relationship.

(from Puerto del Sol, Spring 2006)

I don’t imagine Gina will be pleased when she finds out I just slept with her favorite crush.

That’s a pretty good first line, if you ask me. Brief and brisk, this story never strays outside the head of its narrator. You don’t know why the relationship will end, or how Nessa knows so early on that it will. In fact, we’re only in her head in those early morning moments. It’s a weird place to be, as a reader, unsure whether she even holds herself accountable for the one night stand that will be so hurtful to her friend. Maybe it’s too tough a sell in so few pages, or maybe the surface tension is enough.

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